First Draft of my Film

This is the first draft of my film. After viewing my film I have seen many ways that it could be changed for the better.

The fade from white that I have used in my film should be placed at the very start of my film, instead it is a couple of shots in.

With my titles although they stood out and were bold, they could also be changed. Instead of them sliding into the shot I think it would look better if I had the titles more towards the bottom of the screen and the text much bolder. After looking at other films as well I think that I should insert the directors and producers name into the titles, which is myself.

After re-listening to the music playing when the protagonist is taking her jewelery off, I think the music needs to be changed. The reason why I think the music needs to be changed is because when looking back it does not fit the image of the protagonist. The music I may use for the final peice will be more serious and not as cheery.